James Barclay

[Grace]

A life at midnight:
Blue just a four letter word
In Braille beneath the fingers
Which have seen more life
Than the eyes designed to guide them.

Every sound an encyclopaedia;
Knowledge imparted by the
Groan of tired floorboards,
Under leather boots that creak
Or the soft whisper of silk slippers.
Each small song a symphony
Of raw emotion, bleeding into the air.

The scent of a rose a paradise
Enfolded in the damp velvet
Of trembling petals,
With no idea of redness to distort it.

What tragedy a life at midnight
When clear laughter tells a smile,
Cold roughness is the grating speech of stone
And roses smell sweeter in darkness?
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[dragonkillernz]

Well, it's pretty easy to see what this is about, and I think it's great. I especially like the line:

[Grace]

Thanks for reading.
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[Drizzt]

I like the last verse. Sums up everything the poem is saying, especially the last line. Very good! More please!
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[Grace]

Thanks Drizzle. *rubs eyes* Tu voudrai PLUS?
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[Kerela]

I also like it, especially the 2nd verse ist beautiful.
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Albert Einstein

[Grace]

Thank you!
Kudos on your translted work on the poetry thread. It's great, and I'm amazed you managed to translate it.
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[James]

It's a lovely poem, Grace. Full of emotional colour.

Might I make just one suggestion? I'd take the word Braille out. There is plenty in the poem to tell us it concerns blindness.

A line like:
'Spelled out by trembling fingers' or something like that. Hell, I'm no poet. I'm sure you can do much better.

Just my tuppence. Wish I could write verse like that.

James
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[Grace]

*blushes*
Thanks James, that means a lot.
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